Rate My Cold Email

[simpledealersuite]

I absolutely love your subject. I would open that email too.
Your subject and body are both good.
In my experience, you want your email to be short and to the point.
Maybe you could consider a smaller body like the one below?


Subject: I’m 17, Can I Help Out?
Body:
Hi Mr. (NAME)!

I saw videos posted by your (DEALERSHIP/COMPANY) about your (CARS/SERVICE) but your videos should be getting much more likes and views, especially with (NUMBER) followers.

I’m 17 years old, and I understand SM better than most people. I can help strengthen your presence on SM and grow your following/views.
(I’m also certified in Marketing, and I’ve been a car enthusiast my entire life.)

There’s a YouTube link down below, if you want to check out a playlist of some of my work.

I’d love to hear back and work with you.
Have an Amazing Rest of Your Day,
(MY NAME)

 

[autovantaofficial]

I like it. I believe it was Ryan who eluded to it as well but your age/lack of experience can be your greatest strength here. I am sure you will come across a handful of dealer principals or GMs who will see your hunger and in turn see their younger selves in you. Best of luck and keep us all updated!

Thank you!

 

[autovantaofficial]

I absolutely love your subject. I would open that email too.
Your subject and body are both good.
In my experience, you want your email to be short and to the point.
Maybe you could consider a smaller body like the one below?


Subject: I’m 17, Can I Help Out?
Body:
Hi Mr. (NAME)!

I saw videos posted by your (DEALERSHIP/COMPANY) about your (CARS/SERVICE) but your videos should be getting much more likes and views, especially with (NUMBER) followers.

I’m 17 years old, and I understand SM better than most people. I can help strengthen your presence on SM and grow your following/views.
(I’m also certified in Marketing, and I’ve been a car enthusiast my entire life.)

There’s a YouTube link down below, if you want to check out a playlist of some of my work.

I’d love to hear back and work with you.
Have an Amazing Rest of Your Day,
(MY NAME)

Here's a shorter one I had before.

Subject: Mr/Ms. NAME, I'm 17 - Can I Help?

Hi Mr/Ms. NAME!

Hope you’re doing well. Don’t want to waste your time, I’ll keep this short.

Was scrolling IG, saw your page and how it lacked interactions, even with (NUMBER) followers.

I’m 17 years old and was wondering if I could make you quality content for your page.

I understand SM & the algorithm better than most, due to my age.

Here’s a YouTube Playlist of some of my editors’ work. It's built to showcase editing abilities.
(link)

Shoot back an email if you’re interested!

Have a Great Day,
My Name


I might also replace "Was scrolling IG, saw your page and how it lacked interactions, even with (NUMBER) followers. " with "I saw your job posting on Indeed, noticed you were in need of a Social Media Manager, especially with your lack of interactions on SM"

If I contact dealers on Indeed who are looking for SM managers, I'm more likely to get a reply.

 

[frankmissing]

A lot of tests were done with a cold chain of letters! And it is very important for me personally that the recipient's name is known and my letters do not end up in spam! And these 2 parameters greatly affect the final result!

 

[zande299]

It's easy to read, so that's what matters.

Also, be aware of who you're sending your emails. You don't want to get a bad sender's reputation. I use this tool to check the emails. That way, my email is preserved, so to speak, and the deliverability remains untouched.

 

[joe.pistell]

IMO, use dealer's IG images to trigger them into deeper consideration


Subject: I’m 17, Can I Help Out?
Body:
Hi Mr. (NAME)!

I saw videos posted by your (DEALERSHIP/COMPANY) about your (CARS/SERVICE) but your videos should be getting much more likes and views, especially with (NUMBER) followers.

I’m 17 years old, and I understand SM better than most people. I can help strengthen your presence on SM and grow your following/views.
(I’m also certified in Marketing, and I’ve been a car enthusiast my entire life.)

There’s a YouTube link down below, if you want to check out a playlist of some of my work.

I’d love to hear back and work with you.
Have an Amazing Rest of Your Day,
(MY NAME)

 

[flosho]

"I'm 17 can I help you out" sounds like someone signed up for porno site.

Real Sus.


Also if you're going to hit up a dealership and engage them about their lack of social media engagement, make sure you have examples of success stories and a strong social presence on your own.


Someone hits me up to show how awesome they are at social media and then has 400 followers on IG, doesn't build credibility, IMO.